I’m working on a Psychology writing question and need a sample draft to help me learn.
Instructions: The following passage contains a number of examples of language usage that are potentially biased. Find the errors and re-write the passage using bias-free language. **Please BOLD your re-written words/phrases.** — 30 APA Style Errors can be found in the passage below! Total = 30pts
The aim of this study was to examined whether there were differences in the participation rates of white students and minority students in university science classes. In addition, we wanted to determine whether students who had been identified as having a learning disability differed from students with no identifiable learning disability. The subjects in the study consisted of 247 white students (120 men and 127 girls) and 250 minority students (125 men, 125 girls). The minority group included Hispanic, Orientals, and African-American students. Subjects were given surveys that included questions about how often they participated in class discussions. In each group, approximately 20% of the students had been identifies as Learning Disabled (LD). Fifteen subjects (7 white, 8 minority) failed to fill out their surveys correctly and were therefore not included in subsequent analyses. Subjects ages ranged from average-age to elderly students. In addition, ten percent of subjects indicated they were homosexual.
The results of the study indicated white and minority students did not differ in their rate of participation in science classes. However, there were differences in the observed consequences of participation by group. For the white group, participation was not associated with higher grades. When a minority student participated actively in class, his grade was higher. Furthermore, results indicated that LD students participated less frequently in class discussions than normal students, but when the LDs did participate their grades were higher. Additional analyses revealed elderly senior students had high class participation, followed by homosexual students. The results of this study should be of interest to department faculty.
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